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Arashi Satou (Lightning Gadget) (Taser Edit complete)

Post by Guest on Sun Oct 20, 2013 7:56 pm

Real World:
Name:  Satou Arashi (Last, First)

Age: 14 (Third Year Middle School)

Gender: Male

Appearance:

History: Arashi is your go to guy for tech support. Raised with the technological smarts of his father, a computer programmer, and the love of his mother, a teacher, Arashi was blessed with a strong mind and the heart of one who serves. He was given a neurolinker at birth for the simple reason that he needed to be exposed to technology so that when he got older he would have that edge needed to be able to survive in a world that was filled with technology. He was taught that the more you knew about what you used the better you got at using it and throughout his youth Arashi was known to absorb knowledge like a sponge quickly advancing through his classes with high ranks while building little programs and gadgets for personal use.

Towards the end of his first year and the start of his second year in middle school, Arashi started offering tech support services to his fellow schoolmates and even showing a few programs and gadgets that could help them out. However this would prove to be a trouble magnet as rumors started to spread about many of Arashi’s customers being female in gender and that Arashi was ‘hooking up’ (aka direct connecting) with these girls, which made the others male’s jealous. At first the males only threatened Arashi (mostly by e-mail) and told him to quit hooking up with girls or he would need tech-support. Arashi read these threats noted that they were from the same couple of males from some of the sports clubs (aka meat-head jocks) and stored them away in a personal folder and ignored their threats continuing to help out people that wanted his help.

However one day he found a package and inside it was several of his gadgets that he had given to various people to help them out, however they were broken and beyond repair. Arashi was hurt however he called the people he had given them to asking about the gadgets. Most of them didn't say anything or were busy which made Arashi suspect the jocks were harassing his customers. However one girl Ami Menzakani, told Arashi that she had it in her bag and that it was stolen out of her bag and that it had been in full working condition when she put it in her bag and she wondered who could have stolen it only to break it and send it to him. Arashi jokingly told her that someone must have not read the instruction document that was with it. This earned a slight giggle from Ami and she asked if he could build her another one if it wasn't too much trouble. Arashi agreed to build her another one in exchange that she would meet with him after school in the club room where he did his work to hang out. Ami agreed. Arashi decided that it was time for some action and prepared a few things in his lab.

The two met up and Arashi had a gadget ready for Ami however a few moments later a few of the jocks came into the lab. Arashi greeted them with a friendly smile however noted that Jocks were mad. Arashi told Ami to use back door to get out of the room and away from the jocks. Ami was worried but did as she was told and left. The jocks demanded to know why Arashi was still doing his work and still hooking up with girls. Arashi made a comment saying that he had customers who liked his work and it was none of their business on who he did work for. The jocks decided noting that Arashi had no social cameras in his lab decided to destroy Arashi's lab and gadgets. Arashi watched as they did the damage making worried comments about the prices of various things and adding them up like they were points against him and after about 50000 yen (or just above 500 dollars) of damage, one punch to Arashi's face for good measure, and threats to hurt him worse if he told anyone, the jocks left thinking that their message had finally gotten through.

Ami came back into the room a few moments later having heard everything and wanted to know if Arashi was alright. Arashi made a comment that the amount of damage to him was nothing compared to the damage was done to the lab and his gadgets. Ami moaned and wondered how Arashi was going to pay to replace everything. Arashi just grinned in pain and said he'll find a way.

A way was found easily because Arashi had set a trap for the jocks. He had installed several cameras into the room not connected to the school network (and therefore undetectable by any program or virus they may have had to avoid cameras) and recorded the whole incident and had it posted to the network. At lunch one day in front of many at the school the jocks were arrested by the student council enforcement committee, as it had been school property the jocks had destroyed. When the jocks asked who had told on them. The committee leader mentioned that someone had posted videos on the network under a false name and had e-mailed those videos and a ton of other evidence of their crimes to the committee and that it was a time to put a stop to it. The Jocks were expelled from the school, ordered to pay for the damages, and had to deal with the law for assault and harassment.

With this victory over his enemies, life returned to normal for Arashi. Arashi continued to be friends with many of his customers helping them out and he couldn't be happier. At the beginning of his third year, Ami approached him again for some tech support this time it was for a mysterious program she had acquired and she wondered if Arashi would take a look at it before she did anything else with it. The program was Brain Burst.

Arashi asked her the usual questions including where she had gotten it, when she had gotten it, what it did, and why did she wait this long before approaching him. Ami answered his questions with the statement that four week ago she had received a mysterious e-mail with the program and the offering to unlock a mysterious acceleration function within her neurolinker that seemed to stop time, and the reason she had waited so long was that she was supposed to keep her new found acceleration power a secret until a few days ago when she received permission to give copies of it to others and wanted to know if Arashi wanted a copy to tinker with. Arashi was curious about the acceleration function and said he would take a look at it and see what he could do with it.

That evening Arashi had a horrible nightmare. He was a robot made of many armaments and gadgets surrounded in his lab filled with gadgets he had built. However jocks, this time an entire army, came into the room smashed it up then proceeded to strip and smash Arashi up leaving only his head which was kicked and sent rolling down into a steep garbage pit where the rest of his ‘body’ and everything else had ended up. He was stunned but then he said “I wish that I could give these gadgets life so that they can take revenge  when wronged."
 
Personality: Arashi is friendly and willing to help people out. He always has a smile and seems to joke about life. But when things turn serious, his mind goes into overdrive and he thinks and plans logically. He thinks about situations and tries to come up with solutions to problems. He rarely is the aggressor when it comes to fights and focuses on self defense and/or a way to get revenge indirectly.

Points of Distinction:
Technology is his forte.
He has many gadgets and programs that he has built
He's gaining some ground in the technology community outside his school.
He can not fight so he avoids fighting directly.
He jokes in one liners or comments


Brain Burst Avatar:

Lightning Gadget

Appearance: A lightning colored (Yellow/Orange) robot like avatar designed similar to this picture



Explanation: Arashi takes pride in his work so he feels that his gadgets represent an extension of his soul and since most gadgets run on electricity, electric element moves seem to be a fitting ability

Special Ability: Gadgets as Limbs

Type: Limited Activation

Cost: One post detach, fifteen posts required before reattachment, one to three posts to reattach, six post cool down

Description: Gadget can have his ‘limbs’ remove themselves from his main body and have them move around like they were independent body parts and some of them, especially his hands, seem to have minds of their own (let's not think dirty here) but all parts will always fall in line when Gadget commands them to and he can reform into his normal self (Provided that no limbs were destroyed). He can separate into eight pieces, 2 hands, 2 arms (upper and lower attached together at elbow) , 1 chest + torso, 2 legs with feet and 1 head.

Effect: Gadget's body breaks down into of 8 pieces. Each piece can not reattach to each other for 150 seconds (2.5 minutes or 15 posts/actions) and upon rebuilding can not remove the part for 60 seconds. (or 6 posts/actions). Also removal of limbs and reattachment is not just instant. The limbs take a few seconds to detach and take a few second to reattach unless the limbs and parts are nearby the main body and reattach themselves manually even then it takes time for all parts to reattach. (1 post minimum 3 posts maximum depending on distance) The limbs move realistically *see side note in later post*

Weakness: While having the ability to make his limbs remove themselves and move around makes Gadget a smaller target and therefore harder to hit from a distance or he can hide himself among the garbage of some stages while sending out one of his hands to do some 'dirty work', hitting any of the limbs deals damage to Gadget directly and he feels it. If you deal enough damage to a limb (15%) it will shatter and be removed from the battle. Every piece can currently only reattach to their proper place and if a connecting piece is destroyed, that limb can not reattach to another place.

Special Ability: Taser

Type: Killer Move

Cost: 25% KG

Description: Gadget holds one of his hands palm out and fires sharp metallic probes attached to wires from each of his fingerpads. The probes hook into an avatar's body and delivers a potent electrical shock. The range for the probes is 5 meters  If his hands are separated from his body due to Gadgets as Limbs each hand can only store enough electrical energy to do one taser attack until they are reattached to his body and recharged.

Effect: Same as description

Weakness: Immunity to Electricity nullifies attack. If hands are separated from body they can be pulled by the wires to the opponent

Stats

Strength: 40 (C)
Agility: 30 (C)
KG: 50 (B)
TAC: 80 (B+)

Direct: 30 (C)
Armor: 10 (D)
Skill: 70 (B+)
Special Defense: 10 (D)

Overall Attack: 100 (A)
Overall Defense: 20 (D)


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Re: Arashi Satou (Lightning Gadget) (Taser Edit complete)

Post by Destination on Mon Oct 21, 2013 10:07 am

So, I've read through your app and have a few comments, most of them on Lightning Gadget itself.

-LG is stated to have two special abilities, one of which has a cost simply labelled 'Passive' and the other as 25% KG. I don't recall saying that the moves available at a Level 1 was changed with the stat system.

I'll therefore take Gadgets As Limbs as an ability having zero cost, and start my comment proper: the move permits too much to be done at Level 1. Breaking himself into 8 pieces surely costs him his mobility and a fair bit of defensive power; that's what I'd accept if the cost of GaL is free. And that's nothing to say of eight pieces, quite a way to carve up an avatar...voluntarily.

-GaL's main fault as a move itself is also that it allows too much to be done. For it's current zero cost, and since no delay period to reform LG was given I'm assuming it's instantaneous, it's too good a defensive skill. As I understand, it allows Gadget to break himself apart whenever an attack comes at him and then reform himself, unharmed and ready to hit back. I'll leave it to the imaginations of others what this means for all kinds of attacks...

-Conduction is his KM, I assume? Then the cost needs to be detailed such that it's an instant consumption of the 25%, in case it's unclear. I may be approving you, but the others are watching too.

Now overall, I find that the main focus of Gadget is in the ability to split himself apart and reform, possibly elsewhere too. I find the link to Satou's trauma particularly shaky as well:


    Trauma: "Arashi seemed to be oblivious to these threats and just laughed it off but deep down he was hurting especially when his gadgets were broken."

    Reaction: "He stopped providing tech support on a school-wide basis and just withdrew himself into a computer lab."


If you ask me, this sounds more like the trauma of a Red, not a Yellow. A Yellow would have continued with business as usual, or even taken a leaf from Noumi's books and used his gadgets to manipulate his bullies, getting them into trouble. That he doesn't seems to hold any anger against them (Reference: He thinks about situations and tries to come up with solutions to problems. He rarely holds hate against people but he does have a breaking point.") is even more contradictory. Last, and maybe not least, is the second contradiction that he "tries to come up with solutions to problems", yet his solution is to retreat to the computer lab and leave his enemies behind: inaction and an apparent belief in a lack of personal strength.

Overall, Arashi gives me both a James Bond-like vibe and a curious touch of cowardice. The James Bond analogy seems fitting in more than one way as well... <_<

Not approved.


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Re: Arashi Satou (Lightning Gadget) (Taser Edit complete)

Post by Nakara on Mon Oct 21, 2013 10:49 am

In addition to Tus' comments I would point out that "Lightning" isn't really a color, doing a google search yielded no results for it and lightning itself is usually white not yellow but can be ANY color.
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Re: Arashi Satou (Lightning Gadget) (Taser Edit complete)

Post by Guest on Mon Oct 21, 2013 3:37 pm

@ Nakara

You will find that Lightning Yellow (if you search includes Lightning Yellow), is a slightly off tone of yellow. A De saturation of pure yellow by about 10%

http://www.colorcombos.com/tags/colors/lightning-yellow

@ Tusjecht

Alright let's solve this by confronting each point you pulled out. I somewhat figured the way I had it worded would pose balance issues. Give me about 24 hours to think it over and reformat character

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Re: Arashi Satou (Lightning Gadget) (Taser Edit complete)

Post by Detective on Mon Oct 21, 2013 5:55 pm

Hi there, I am no mod admin or anything, but I think I can help in limiting your ability for level one a bit Smile


First, why not give a limitation to how far can the parts be from the main body (I suggest the torso+chest part), so that body parts won't be able to strike from far away.

Second, I presume the parts move on their own by levitating if I understood correctly, no? if so, give a distance to how high you can go (which would make sense here of course XD), and if possible, make it so that the feet parts will have to stay on, or atleast near the ground, so that there'll be a rough estimate of where that limitation starts.

The third is a question actually - how can you tell where your parts are? and if you can tell where the other parts are, you still need to see the parts when they in a longer distance away from you to correctly aim with them to your opponent no? (unless you can see with all 8 parts...), I believe that can be another limitation as well Smile

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Re: Arashi Satou (Lightning Gadget) (Taser Edit complete)

Post by Guest on Tue Oct 22, 2013 4:14 am

@ Tusjecht

First Point and Second Point, Cost

GaL (Gadget as Limbs) is as you said a zero cost move. It does not need KG to be used. (I mean who in their right mind would pay anything only to make themselves 'fall apart')

The reason I said passive is because I assumed passive means that he can do it at anytime he desires without a cost, aside from the weaknesses noted but I guess the term I’m actually looking for is limited activation.

My ability to fall apart and rebuild myself without a cost is, (if used in a Godmodding fashion) an unfair move. Therefore I will add a realistic cool down period for breaking down and rebuilding myself. When I break into my various parts, they can not reattach themselves for 150 seconds (or 15 posts/actions) and upon rebuilding I can not remove the part for 30 seconds. (or 3 posts/actions). Also removal of limbs and reattachment is not just instant. The limbs take a few seconds to deattach and take a few second to reattach unless the limbs and parts are nearby the main body and reattach themselves manually even then it takes a few seconds for all parts to reattach. (1 post minimum and up to two self posts maximum depending on distance)

That added time cost should be fair enough so that I can't just fall apart and avoid an attack only to reform in an instant.

Side Note

Also I should define how my limbs function in general as Detective has bought up an idea about how my parts 'float' because I do not define it currently.

I'm going to show you two scenes of a movie called The Iron Giant in which I base my idea of robotic gadgets limbs moving on their own.

Scene: Saying Grace

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ydMwnnhLnLU

You will notice that The Iron Giant's hand does not float but more or less walks using it's digits like legs.

Resurrection

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=yhaoJxQpRg0

You'll see that each of his parts move in a realistic fashion (screws and joints roll, chest crawls, feet hop) as they gather to a particular place, I.E his head

From this I will define how my various parts move about and how fast

Head: Roll, Hop, or using a free hand to carry it (Slow)
Hands: Spider Walk, Jump (same as the Iron Giant's hands) (Medium)
Arms: Worm Crawl, (front arm reaches out, plants itself and uses elbow joint to pull back arm) (Slow)
Chest and Torso: no limb crawl (Slow)
Legs: Hop (Slow)

Limit of Range from head: 10 meters radius (I am going for an indirect far range type of fighter) (Covers Detective’s first point)

Question: Can I see from my various parts and can I sense where they are if I can’t see them?

At this current level, I will say no to both.

However, that does not mean my body parts are completely blind. My hands can sense things (obstacles, buildings, opponents, etc) at a limited range (1 meter) while the others part only have a 0.5 meter range and therefore if detached from my head don’t need my eyes to ‘see’ their surroundings. In addition, my hands in particular contain an intelligence of their own so they don’t need my mind to control them but they will need instructions to execute special abilities, (conduction, etc) and they will do this by sending a request for instructions from the main operator, or me. They will usually give a report of surroundings using text-based communication and ask for a command and it will usually take one post to execute said command. They also have a sense of self-preservation so if threatened like with a gun or a physical kick they will escape instead of attacking directly.

Okay now that we’ve defined my limbs and made modifications. Let’s move on to my next ability, Conduction

Point Three: Conduction

Yes Conduction is a killer type move that instantly consumes 25% killer gauge to be executed. It’s a special attack designed to give my character an offensive type power.

Point Four: Connection with Trauma

In truth, this is where I get lost because I am not fully sure what actions equal to what color. I was aiming for an orange type reaction thinking that he makes a joke about it but knows he can’t really do anything about it so he just accepts it changing his behavior so that it doesn’t happen again. If that action makes it seem more red then orange or yellow. I can change my story to make it more my color Yellow/Orange.

One of my original ideas was to do as you suggested Tusjecht and use my gadgets take revenge against my enemies but to me that seemed like a blue reaction, which I’m not a blue I want to be Yellow or Orange.

I have modified the story to make it sound more Yellow. Please Comment on if it is good enough and if the data I provided here is good enough


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Post by Guest on Thu Oct 24, 2013 3:08 am

About 48 hours have passed and I am still waiting for a response

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Re: Arashi Satou (Lightning Gadget) (Taser Edit complete)

Post by Destination on Thu Oct 24, 2013 9:15 am

Alright, after two days of back-breaking running and obstacle clearing I finally have the time to see your character.

About the limbs, I understand that they must touch the opponent to execute Conduction. Could they also grab onto the opponent and hinder movement? How much strength is needed to escape their grip?

After a single use of Conduction, each limb needs to be reattached to the body and recharged; can they make their way back, or does Gadget need to come over and fetch the part?

Minor point: your Points of Distinction entry is still WIP.

As for your question, 'having (his) gadgets take revenge' is not necessarily a Blue reaction since the link between aggressor and target is less clear. Anyway the trauma is now much better and reflexts a Yellow's manipulative nature more truer than your initial attempt.

I'll be available this weekend of course, so if you can clarify the last bit about your limbs then I'll approve you.


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Post by Guest on Thu Oct 24, 2013 4:06 pm

Question: Can my limbs grab opponents and hinder movement?

Answer: My hands can grab onto an opponent (hand on shoulder, leg, etc) and cause an opponent to panic but the amount of strength needed to release said part from hand is next to nothing. All you really got to do is shake them off and they will let go. The other limbs don't have really that much gripping power alone.

Added Note: However now that I think about your question and get a Halloween type idea, I can pull a headless, handless zombie grab and hold move using my chest and torso, arms and legs reattached to each other but the amount of strength needed to break free is low. Anyone with F to D grade strength can break free after one post and the other grades can just shake them off. High grades like B+ and higher can just send them flying

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Question: After using Conduction my limbs need to reattach and recharge can they return to me or do I need to go fetch them.

Answer: They can return to me they just can't use conduction unless they return, attach and get a recharge. I may move my head towards them

Added thought for future

Currently only my hands can use conduction but I'm thinking if I upgrade conduction via a level up, I can have the rest of my body use it as a form of added defense/offense or if I upgrade my body and have my chest and torso obtain a battery pack I can have my hands recharge if they are touching the pack without having to reattach to the main body.

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Re: Arashi Satou (Lightning Gadget) (Taser Edit complete)

Post by Destination on Thu Oct 24, 2013 7:04 pm

Approved. Play nicely and sensibly.


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Post by Guest on Thu Oct 24, 2013 7:06 pm

I will do my best

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Re: Arashi Satou (Lightning Gadget) (Taser Edit complete)

Post by Guest on Tue Dec 03, 2013 4:41 am

Okay. Due to a major disagreement about my conduction move bypassing the accepted formula system. (Which I still think is flawed) I was allowed to make adjustments to my profile changing it around. So I decided to also change my stats around so that my attacks can actually do something now to everyone including the Green walls.




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Re: Arashi Satou (Lightning Gadget) (Taser Edit complete)

Post by Nakara on Tue Dec 03, 2013 4:56 pm

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Re: Arashi Satou (Lightning Gadget) (Taser Edit complete)

Post by Neko Miale on Tue Dec 03, 2013 6:36 pm

I approve this.
(Tusjecht if you got a complain on this you better put up some good reasons. )
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